A birthday wish

By RON, Posted 22 May 2009

The chase was on and i was running as fast as I could. After running for a while, I came across to a dead and had no place to go. He pointed out the gun at me and fired. Bang! Bang! Bang! Three shots were fired and none missed. I fell on the ground and everything went hazy..

He walked close to me. Sat in front of me, took off his hat and smiled. 

“y o u  l o o k  s c a r e d  R o n?” His voice echoed.

He grabbed my shirt and pulled me up. He looked into my eyes. I could barely see as my vision went blurry. I struggle but managed to say

who are you?

“Look closer you fool”. He replied.

 

----- my phone woke me up. Knight was calling. I didn’t pick up. Went straight to the wash room. Splashed cold water on my face. I was thinking about the dream! It wasn’t over. I looked at the mirror. Splashed some more water on my face. Who was he? I questioned myself.

Ring! Ring! Knight called again and I picked up this time.

- Dude! where were you? he yelled. 

- I was trying to take a nap!

- It should be day time in your place and you’re sleeping?

- yea. I worked till late last night and didn’t go to work. Wait a min! it should be mid night at your place, isn’t?

- that’s the reason I called dude! I just had a weirdest dream and you won’t believe what I just saw.

- please don’t tell me you just tried to kill me!

- HOLY JAMBO! How the hell you guessed that?

- I didn’t guess dude! I was there in your dream.

- what?

- forget it. tell me watup!

- no no no! tell me, how the hell you guessed it?

- can’t explain it dude. I think we both were dreaming at the same phase.

- you mean. You saw me chasing you and shoot you?

- no. I was trying to figure out who was that guy. So, how did it end? Did I die in your part?

- I couldn’t finish it either. I called you right after I woke up from my dream. 

- oh great! aright! Dude. I think I’ll go for a drink. Feeling fuzzy. Talk to ya later. 

- hold on!

- what?

- aren’t you forgetting something?

- umm! Yea. my wallet. Thanks.

- No. not your wallet!

- then?

- it’s 22nd May dude!

- what about it?

- figure it out. Bye. And call me when you do.

- Aright. I’m on it.

 

------ I came out of my house and went straight to the pub. Ordered Vodka. And then I suddenly realized that date. 22nd May. It’s knight birthday. Called him straight away. 

- you figured it out, didn’t you?

- Happy birthday dude.

- thanks. I wish you were here. I’ve got all my 3 girl friends lined up for dates today. Yay!

- lol. some people just never change. You go have fun with them mate. I’ll send you a gift later.

- gift? From BD? what gift are you planning to send?

- I’ll write a blog for you.

- lol. seriously?

- yea. promise. Will do it after I go back home.

- aright. Cool. Thanks. Catch you later then. Bye.

- you go have fun today. Bye.

 

------ I came home and start writing this for knight. And then I thought, he deserve a better gift than just a simple blog. So here it is.

 

“ Knight is a very good potential writer. He’s still novice but he has the gist a writer needs to start his career. Unfortunately he loves to write about things which gamers don't pay much attention and which Love! If he were in any other forum relates to the subject Love, he would've been a better writer by now. but he preferred to stick to us and help our community grow bigger. So, those of you haven’t read the story he is currently working with, I recommend you read it. he needs our support and guidance, so that he can be a better writer in future.

 

Read this article, as it’s not too long and give him some proper feedback. He needs to know where he is making mistakes and what should he improve particularly. I’ve made it easier for you guy and have his first 5 chapters as PDF”

 

Sorry for the long blog and thanks in advance for helping out a very potential writer.

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  • Practice, practice and...practice that's all a writer needs. :)

    Posted May 22, 2009
  • I dig it...nicely written. Some minor spelling and grammar errors, but that's about it great job :D

    Posted May 22, 2009
  • I already wished him.Tongue out..nywaz..(Happy Birthday Knight..Smile.It's great to have a gamer and writer like you around us.HAVE FUN.Laughing)..btw..i've never seen anyone giving a blog as a birthday gift..innovative indeed.Wink


    And about WIW i've already read chapter 1-5...it's very well written. Smile

    Posted May 22, 2009
  • I completely forgot about it :P I'll try to finish it by tomorrow and will send him my feedback :) And, nicely written blog :) I want a birthday gift too :P

    Posted May 22, 2009
  • That was the coolest gift i've ever been givin! Thank you Ron, thank you oh so much. I'll write upa few things once i'm out of class. Thank you

    Posted May 22, 2009
  • told him happy birthday the second he turned 17 lol... wish i could have done something a little more for your birthday Knight....hmmm, give me a while to think...im sure i can find something...

    Posted May 22, 2009
  • Happy Birthday Knight.  keep on practicing and you will become one hell of an author :).

    Posted May 22, 2009
  • Oh yeah...Happy Birthday Knight :D

    Posted May 22, 2009
  • Hm, looks pretty nice. A couple things could use touching up, though.

    Posted May 22, 2009
  • Nice birthday gift Ron and nicely written :) And, I’ve already given my feedback to knight :)

    Posted May 23, 2009
  • I was thinking of Black through the whole story.

    Posted May 23, 2009
  • Happy Belated Birthday Knight! Whereaver you are?

    Posted May 23, 2009
  • avatar RON

    @ EliteEdge: what if i tell that i was inspired by the same thing you were thinking ;)

    Posted May 23, 2009
  • @Ron then I would say you HAVE to read that book.

    Posted May 25, 2009
  • avatar RON

    the time i read the story in your blog, i knew that i had to read this book. i'm just waiting for my copy to arrive.

    Posted May 25, 2009

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